Out of the three sample papers, in my opinion number one was best one. In his first paragraph he asks us how can someone overcome their obstacles, why they are put in that certain situation. After he tells us, Junior feels everything he does is wrong, but doesn't want to end up like the rest of his clan and wants more for himself and doesn't want them to feel disappointed in him, but he won't give up in changing himself. Every time the writer spoke about the book or a scene in the book he always had a quote from that scene which made me visualize what he was trying to tell me and his transactions were good. It was an ok convincing paper, the writer kept talking about the horse burning and drowning and would also relate it to Junior in the current problems he was going through which made it more interesting to know what was going to happen next after the horse disappeared. His topic sentence in the beginning was good because the questions that he asked went with it and it transacted well. Through out the whole paper Junior had to analyze and think carefully what his next move was going to be and what the consequences were, all of that led back to his topic.
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